Jeffrey Loew, e-mail response for 5/15/97 class:

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From: Jeffrey Loew

Subject: Vicki's Hypertext

All right, I'm on what appears to be a title page, but with no information

but the title, the author, and three links with unilluminating titles.

Guess I'll try one: Elaine 1999 (it's first).

First page: definitely Joycean (Michael, that is): 1st person, an ambiguous

sense of mystery, little revealing of plot. One piece of succinct info: 5

years in the same house. Why did the boy run to a tree? Would he really

have something to sell right off the schoolbus?

(My) second page, continuing with Elaine 1999:

Nice jolt: here's his mother, there's his body. The kind of leap that

Hypertext seems to invite. My first thought was the boy, only because of the

convention by which a masculine pronoun generally is matched to the last

male we read about. We seem to be offered in this passage a kind of

exposition by association, again a model to which hypertext is well-suited

since nonlinear.

On to 'Who is Elaine?':

Good to meet Aaron. His name seemed to leak out prematurely on the last

page, leaving me wondering if we'd be bombarded with faceless names,

distracting null signifiers.

Continuing 'Who is Elaine' had brought us to 'Who is Michael?' Either a tad

inelegant or a statement about identity -- Does Elaine view herself as the

sum of her men? Reading on: Difficult to maintain the de riguer ironic tone

while waxing lovingly over Michael's gaze; Again, perhaps the form reveals

the function, but I'm not as convinced by this passage -- I preferred the

spare language of the previous pages.

I now have only the option of 'More Dreams,' although I have not yet visited

'Dreams.' Something to think about in hypertext design: the adjective

'more' implies an order, and even perhaps a kind of valuation, between

links. Reading on: Hmmm... the dreams are enigmatic, but I'm not sure that

I want to know more. The table scene is the only one that resonates,

although it might be too large a chunk of narrative to maintain the tone of

the rest.

The links that remain are titles of those I have visited already. My first

thought is that I will have seen those pages, but I'll check anyway, just in

case the links can change. I still haven't visited the link called

'Dreams,' and it may be reachable from there.

'Who is Elaine?': The same, as I figured. But here is a link to 'Dreams.'

This is a more effective encounter with Michael -- again we have the

postmodern voice of the 'objective' first-person observer, reporting the

material facts of her life as though they have no underlying soul or

foundation. I like this tone, and it seems suited to the medium, although

this is at least in part because this is the tone most hypertexts seem to

adopt; but also, perhaps, because the medium celebrates surface and

fragmentation; attempts at depth and cohesion return the reader to the

handholding stage, where an author informs us that "this means this," at

times with the assumed familiarity of "you know what I mean?" Perhaps we

don't, or don't care to. The postmodern subject does not even know what she

herself means, or if she means at all.

In order to return to the home page I have to jump over to 'More Dreams.' I

notice at the top the phrase, 'Dreams Two': again this seems to advocate a

particular order that the author prefers, a 'correct' order.

Here at the home page I find a link I forgot: 'Names.' All right, a title

that by convention suggests a cast of characters is instead a mystery; a

"question," as Michael says. Not a bad place to begin a hypertext reading.

Or to end one.

Overall, Vicki, I think this is a good start. I want to read more, anyway.

You seem to allow the form of the hypertext to add layers of meaning to your

story, so I think that your project may provide an argument in favor of

hypertext as something new, something that can help us to think about the

separation of the world from our ability to perceive and express it. such

speculation will also lead us to revisit how print culture does this

already, and how it might do it differently. I look forward to seeing this

at the end of the quarter. (I was going to say, "When it's done," but of

course it need not ever be brought to a finished state.)

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